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Correction for Sasukegasim by boscaresque Correction for Sasukegasim by boscaresque
Hey, :iconsasukegasim: I hope you're doin' okay. :D

For the Improvement Club.

I'm not very good at explaining things that's why I don't do these very often, but I hope this helps at least a little.

This is by no means perfect, though.

1.) Overall, I think her expression is very good. It definitely conveys the mood I think you are going for. I know that your style is different from mine, but like I say all the time, it is easier to stylize once you know the basics of realism. I hope that you will be able to incorporate some of my suggestions into whatever style you choose. :) Like I said, I fail at drawing manga style, so yeah.

2.) You said you wanted help with the chest, shoulders, and head, so those are the areas I tried to focus on. Overall, the body just seems a bit too small for the head, but don't worry, it's a quick fix by making the shoulders broader and lower.

3.) Her boobs are a bit too high on her chest. (If you are a girl and if you have boobs) look in mirror at your own chest and see where on your chest the boobs start. Seriously, it totally helps.

4.) This is just a little thing, but I do like the way you drew the hair, how you got very detailed with the different strands. One suggestion I would give to make it look more lifelike is just to loosen up with your strokes, make the strands a bit more flowy and soft.

Hm yeah, I think that's it for now. If you have any questions, just ask?
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Neomc Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Great correction and I think very helpful for a lot more struggling beginning artists. Definitely do more!
I do find it funny how you drew the heavily sexualized boobline which you would normally only see with a push-up bra; in combination with that realistic (and beautiful!:blush:) sketch, it just seemed a little silly. However, that may just be your own style; I didn't mean to offend :D
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boscaresque Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012
Ahaha, thanks for pointing that out; I did not even realize that I did that. :)

Thanks for the pointer.
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Neomc Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, you're welcome. I just noticed it :D
Your gallery is great ^^ I especially love your somewhat more art nouveau and 1920's drawings :)
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boscaresque Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Thank you very much. :)
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